rlm@0: Untitled
rlm@0: by Shangri-la
rlm@0: 
rlm@0: Heyyo people. This is a poem I wrote (as of yet untitled) I was hoping you could respond with who you think the cloud is, the emerald-eyed star is, whose point of view is, and anything or anyone else that may seem to appear. And if anything comes to you maybe even a title. Please reply at Shangri_La6@hotmail.com 
rlm@0: Ja ne!
rlm@0: 
rlm@0: All I have is tears and loneliness
rlm@0: Frommy spirit was taken away the things of happiness
rlm@0: They say I have but days to live
rlm@0: Sun is gone, moon is gone, so is my precious star
rlm@0: And so my reign of rain shall continue
rlm@0: Until to me she is returned
rlm@0: He took her from me and she to he
rlm@0: O precious star glowing as strongly as the sun
rlm@0: Now hidden always by some distant cloud
rlm@0: I pushed in front of you
rlm@0: But to me it is worse for I am no longer shined upon
rlm@0: Sun is gone, moon is gone, so is my presious star
rlm@0: Hidden by a cold cruel cloud
rlm@0: O kind Mistress of the Heavens bonds
rlm@0: I beg smile upon me once again
rlm@0: Can my heart take it any more?
rlm@0: Can my heart take it anymore?
rlm@0: O Heavenly Mistress with emerald green eyes
rlm@0: I beseech, I implore, I who worship you
rlm@0: Break free from behind the cold distant cloud
rlm@0: Shine upon me once more
rlm@0: I tire of this reighn of rain
rlm@0: To hear but a whisper of your words
rlm@0: Would send away this madness
rlm@0: Can my heart truly take it any more?
rlm@0: Can my heart break but once more?
rlm@0: Come to me from your cruel master
rlm@0: Come from behind that cloud
rlm@0: Back to my arms
rlm@0: I am unworthy of such and angel
rlm@0: But he is even more
rlm@0: He who hides you away fromme
rlm@0: Your, friend, Your confidant, Yourlover
rlm@0: But the last you do not know yet
rlm@0: O beloved of the Great Mothers wombs
rlm@0: Come to me from your cruel cloud
rlm@0: I will wait for you on the morrow
rlm@0: If you do not come then
rlm@0: I shall wait each morrow after the next morrow
rlm@0: And so when you come to me
rlm@0: The sorrow will be gone from my heart
rlm@0: And so goes the reign of my rain
rlm@0: Can my heart take that much more?
rlm@0: Can it truly break any more?
rlm@0: ...Yes it can take it much much longer
rlm@0: Yes it can break so many times over
rlm@0: Butonly for you my precious star
rlm@0: My darling precious emerald-eyed star.