# HG changeset patch
# User Robert McIntyre <rlm@mit.edu>
# Date 1329591105 25200
# Node ID 71946ec07be92d4d2e4e78fc231acfea7a4ce5dd
# Parent  5d448182c8077dad5563ac016a911d94377a0e66
sending draft letter for review

diff -r 5d448182c807 -r 71946ec07be9 winston-intro.txt
--- a/winston-intro.txt	Sat Feb 18 11:42:34 2012 -0700
+++ b/winston-intro.txt	Sat Feb 18 11:51:45 2012 -0700
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
 show each sense in action. Please look through the articles, in
 particular the video showcase, and tell me what you think.
 
-Video Showcase : http://aurellem.localhost/cortex/org/cover.html
+Video Showcase : http://aurellem.org/cortex/org/cover.html
 
 Introduction:
 http://aurellem.org/cortex/html/intro.html
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@
       creature has direct control over placement/creation of objects
       via simulated telekinesis. The creature observes this sub-world
       through it's normal senses and uses its observations to make
-      predictions about it's top level world.
+      predictions about its top level world.
 
     * Integrate the simulated world with Genesis, so that Genesis
       could use the simulated world to answer questions about a
@@ -77,9 +77,8 @@
 can't wait to hear your critiques and suggestions.
 
 Finally, regarding next year at MIT, can I be considered for the
-position of TA for 6.034 or 6.xxx? Also, do you want me to return Fall
-or Summer?
+position of TA for 6.034 or 6.xxx? Also, do you want me to return to
+MIT at the beginning of Fall or at the beginning of Summer?
 
 Sincerely, 
-
 --Robert McIntyre